Writing Fantasy || Logline (Elevator Pitch)

What is a logline?

Have you ever been in a situation where you tell someone you’re writing a book, all excited, and then they ask you what it’s about, and you get that glazed look like you just woke up from a nap? Yeah, I did that a lot with my first book. Then someone told me at a conference that I needed a logline. A logline is an extended premise sentence. It tells your readers more about your story. Your one-sentence premise catches their attention and the logline gets them hooked. The idea is to leave them wanting more without giving away your entire plot. The logline is what you use as your Elevator Pitch.

Why you need an elevator pitch for your fantasy/fiction novel

The Elevator Pitch is meant to be answered in the time it takes the elevator to get to the next floor, because that’s sometimes all the time you have with someone in person, and it’s the time most people online will take to decide if they want to spend time getting to know more. So–thank you for sticking around so far!

The logline is also a gem for social media such as Facebook where you have the opportunity to post more words than on Twitter.

5 key components of writing a fantasy/fiction logline

  1. Main Character – the hero/protagonist
  2. Their Situation – their daily life
  3. Their Objective – what they want that they don’t have
  4. Their Opponent – the person or thing that gets in their way
  5. Disaster – you’ll need an epic battle or devastating event

Here’s an example: 

  • Main character

Dave.

  • His present situation (occupation, relationship, what’s going on in his life?)

 He works at a coffee shop.

  • What does he want? (the treasure or objective).

He wants to escape the drudgery of his job and start his own business.

  • Who or what stands in his way? (the antagonist can be a person or situation).

He doesn’t make enough money to start the business because his boss (the antagonist) won’t give him extra hours.

  • What happens to change his life?

He’s met by a band of creatures in the forest, and they take him to a mystical city hidden in the woods. They show him how to make delicious pastries from organic ingredients found in a secret part of the forest. The cakes are healthier and actually help with weight-loss. Dave sees the potential for a successful bakery business.

  • Your story will need some exciting conflict

His boss steals the recipes.

Here’s all the information in one concise sentence:

“Dave, a dissatisfied coffee shop employee, wants nothing better than to quit his job and open his own business but lacks the finances to do that because of his mean boss. Until he meets mystical creatures in the forest who surprisingly change Dave’s aspirations, but Dave’s boss isn’t ready to let him go that easily”.

This is the sentence you use as your Elevator Pitch.


Remember the premises from the last post?

Here are their loglines–

“Colin Wade is on a mission. A mission to study a singularity – the enigmatic centre of a black hole. But things are definitely not going according to plan, as Colin finds himself in an area of space with no visible stars at all until a lone blue light threatens to engulf the ship in a strange fire. Colin will need all of his cunning, and plenty of unlikely help, to solve the mystery of the singularity, or else find himself lost in space indefinitely.”


“Bookstore owner Meryn O’Reilly and Army Captain Jesse Christensen are on opposite sides of a battle. After a series of terrorist attacks in 2053, martial law has been declared in Canada and the military has taken over. When a radical Christian group claims responsibility, Jesse and his platoon are sent to Meryn’s city to keep an eye on the Christians and ensure they are not stepping outside the confines of the law.”


And, by the way, if you come across those pastries, please let me know!

Til next time, know you are loved by the One who made you in His image.

Lynne

 

(note: I’m an Amazon affiliate and receive a small fee for using their images when I promote someone’s work.)

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5 thoughts on “Writing Fantasy || Logline (Elevator Pitch)

      1. Welp. Here are two. These books are already published, and I STILL can’t do it well. Too LONG. And boring…

        Book One: Julia, a senior in high school, wants to escape the meaninglessness of school work and dances to go to college and get a job to earn money for her poor family, but she lacks the volunteer hours required to graduate early. She agrees to tutor three girls at once to earn triple the hours by December, but then her principal throws in extra-curricular activities like decorating the homecoming float and spending time sharing her school spirit. She’s bound and determined to spread herself thin even if that means not sleeping—until her family’s diner explodes and her guardian angel shows up… to kidnap her. When she comes close to failing her family, her principal, and her friends, will Julia give up on her goals for good?

        Book Two: Julia is a high school senior who desperately wants her brother to return to his happy-go-lucky self and make sure demons never harm him again, but her Guardian won’t grant her access to her sword until she spends time away training. But with demons everywhere, she doesn’t have time to wait. Determined to find another way, she winds up in combat with a demon only to realize she’s less capable than she thought—even with the sword she gained without her Guardian’s consent. Without the proper technique, she’s blindsided and her wing is slashed by a demon’s claws—and not just any claws, they’re laced with some soul-sucking poison. The good news is she now understands what’s been causing her brother’s depression. The bad news? Now she’s lost her feelings, too, and so have many other humans. With her will depleted, she may never protect anyone ever again.

        Still working on Book Three which I’m writing now. Thanks!!!! This was great practice for me. Clearly, I need to continue to work on this. 🙂

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